tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post3875377932076364569..comments2024-02-08T02:12:01.350-05:00Comments on The Journey: The Clearing.Michelle Longohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-22091265493218380852012-10-28T16:43:30.619-04:002012-10-28T16:43:30.619-04:00Thanks for getting that song stuck in my head. I ...Thanks for getting that song stuck in my head. I haven't been to RHPS in so long and now you've made me want to go again. Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-23712283695145249382012-10-28T16:42:25.111-04:002012-10-28T16:42:25.111-04:00Thanks again for the comment. I'm giving this...Thanks again for the comment. I'm giving this and your email a lot of thought!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-9386785250695708452012-10-28T16:41:41.668-04:002012-10-28T16:41:41.668-04:00I don't know what happens next! (thank you, 1...I don't know what happens next! (thank you, 1000 word limit!) I need to think about it. I have one image in my head outside the phone booth, but I can't figure out the next part. I was hoping this week's prompt would suggest something, but not yet. We'll see. Thanks for enjoying it!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-76263594089528304752012-10-28T16:40:13.558-04:002012-10-28T16:40:13.558-04:00I'm glad that you liked that I thew that in th...I'm glad that you liked that I thew that in there - I wasn't sure. I didn't want people to groan. Thanks so much!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-90016406885757505192012-10-25T21:53:49.551-04:002012-10-25T21:53:49.551-04:00You dragged me in right away. Janet is having a ve...You dragged me in right away. Janet is having a very shitty night. I can only hope she ends up with a sweet transvestite from transsexual Transylvania, rather than something truly horrible.Flood G.http://yeahwrite.me/speakeasynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-82488577312742974962012-10-25T19:54:43.335-04:002012-10-25T19:54:43.335-04:00Here's what I like most: The story starts impl...Here's what I like most: The story starts implying one kind of danger, then releases that tension, only to slide into a totally different danger. The build up of one expectation as a misdirection was awesome, and I loved it. <br /><br />I'd love to see this idea fleshed out into something longer. There's an implication of things that you could really work into a bigger, horror-y thing, and I'd be all in for that. <br /><br />Really great use of atmosphere and location. It moved and never stopped. Great work.saalonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15387767847950898434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-27313371583663869412012-10-25T02:15:33.729-04:002012-10-25T02:15:33.729-04:00Oh man, this is spooky! So well done, Michelle. Pl...Oh man, this is spooky! So well done, Michelle. Please please write what happens next!!Melisa @ just begin from herehttp://justbeginfromhere.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-33072480047845212272012-10-24T15:31:02.386-04:002012-10-24T15:31:02.386-04:00"She wished it didn't look so much like t..."She wished it didn't look so much like the kind of night where terrible things happen to girls walking alone on dirt roads."<br /><br />I love this line, and can so picture exactly the kind of night it was. Before I read your sentence all the way at the end, when I finished, I wondered if you were writing some fiction based on the red eyed man from your story a couple weeks ago. I'm so glad you did, this is great!Samantha Brinn Merelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15109435460094526642noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-90739002905471001722012-10-24T12:06:59.962-04:002012-10-24T12:06:59.962-04:00They are totally real! One tried to kill me, so I...They are totally real! One tried to kill me, so I know.<br /><br />Glad you enjoyed!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-28544924431807698312012-10-24T12:06:38.400-04:002012-10-24T12:06:38.400-04:00Oh, come on, night would be so much better, haha! ...Oh, come on, night would be so much better, haha! I don't think she's ok. I don't know what happens exactly, but I'm not a happy ending kinda girl :)Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-12836356966515069232012-10-24T12:05:56.576-04:002012-10-24T12:05:56.576-04:00Yes, that's what I was picturing too!
I'...Yes, that's what I was picturing too! <br /><br />I'm not sure what happened next and I conveniently hit the 1000 word limit :) I'm pretty sure whatever happened next wasn't good thought. I had an idea for taking further but dodged the bullet on having to commit. Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-41446083741118709252012-10-24T12:04:50.542-04:002012-10-24T12:04:50.542-04:00It's true, glowing eyeball people are the wors...It's true, glowing eyeball people are the worst! <br />Thanks!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-41242841431349675942012-10-24T12:04:31.145-04:002012-10-24T12:04:31.145-04:00Thanks! I'm glad I surprised you!Thanks! I'm glad I surprised you!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-39911382626817533222012-10-24T12:04:14.068-04:002012-10-24T12:04:14.068-04:00Sorry I scared you! I love spooky creepy stuff. ...Sorry I scared you! I love spooky creepy stuff. Thanks for the kind words!Michelle Longohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15437193620480920753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-86383138579281270192012-10-24T11:11:36.450-04:002012-10-24T11:11:36.450-04:00hahahahahaha oh man i LOVE this. realy fantastic j...hahahahahaha oh man i LOVE this. realy fantastic job. LOVE LOVE LOVE this so much. <br /><br />ok shit. what do you mean the red eye people are real?? now i'm not so sure i love this so muchchristinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02983259980848913151noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-75066781906043308002012-10-24T08:51:43.425-04:002012-10-24T08:51:43.425-04:00This is great Michelle! I'm so happy I didn...This is great Michelle! I'm so happy I didn't read it last night, so so creepy! I hope by some miracle she's ok.Stacie @ Snaps and Bitshttp://www.snapsandbits.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-85876002017154968152012-10-23T14:55:41.533-04:002012-10-23T14:55:41.533-04:00I love this. The sexual tension and not wanting to...I love this. The sexual tension and not wanting to go too far sexually is universal. I was picturing something like Happy Days' inspiration point. Then, it turned creepy, which I also like. What did the people do?christie tatehttp://www.outlawmama.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-67164560723354235772012-10-23T12:11:48.979-04:002012-10-23T12:11:48.979-04:00Oh, those glowing eyeball people... they get you e...Oh, those glowing eyeball people... they get you every time, don't they? Great job!IASoupMamahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11222652185240780006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-20961966371139884522012-10-23T11:17:17.567-04:002012-10-23T11:17:17.567-04:00This totally plays on our belief that a dark road ...This totally plays on our belief that a dark road is always scarier than people... but your ending blew the snot out of that! It caught me by surprise for sure and I dig it.<br />Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09022540233075643448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2244020003053532919.post-8983175462136211562012-10-23T09:34:50.343-04:002012-10-23T09:34:50.343-04:00I probably won't be able to sleep tonight... S...I probably won't be able to sleep tonight... Scary stuff is just not for me at all. And "The Clearing" already sounded like Stephen King.<br />Way to go with the fiction, just one of your many talents ;)Kerstinhttp://kerstinauer.tumblr.com/noreply@blogger.com